Vivents Mortis - Chapter 2 - First Impressions: Part 2 - elliemoran - Shingeki no Kyojin | Attack on Titan [Archive of Our Own]
Title: Vivents Mortis
Rating: E (for gruesome stuff)
Pairing: Levi & Eren Yeager
Summary: Levi is pretty sure he’s about thirteen, maybe fourteen, and he’s been taking care of himself for most of that time. He’s good at surviving. Which isn’t all that easy when he lives in a post-apocalyptic world full of zombies and territorial gangs that don’t like it when he appropriates their stuff.
So when he’s suddenly landed with a tiny little kid named Eren, he’s not entirely sure what to do with him.
But somehow, he knows he’s going to do everything he can to make sure Eren survives too.
Notes: I’ve never written anything like this before, and it was hard, and I ended up rewriting the first part of this chapter three times. I tried to strike a balance between sentimental and realistic and also a little gross (but not too). Which is kinda what this story is all about but we’ll see how that goes.
"What many writers don’t realize is that muscular prose alone can’t lift a narrative. Any sentence, no matter how powerful, that serves no story purpose is nothing more than wasted words. Obviously, adjective pileups and unnecessary clauses and clunky diction must go. However, effective cutting involves more than line editing. You can also strike whole paragraphs – pages, even! For example, toss out that extra twist and the plot might become clear. Rather than reconstructing the pyramids in five paragraphs (despite that week you spent cruising the Nile), pick the two best and let readers supply some of their own building materials."
I’m actually glad Box-R isn’t doing well yet, and I think it’s gonna be a very good thing for Kyoko.
Everything else she’s been in already had a fairly guaranteed audience to start with; several characters mention how people look forward to the Kurara commercials, and the director is well known for his work; Sho isn’t as popular as Ren, but he’s already got a good size following before the Prisoner arc; and Dark Moon had all sorts of hype, both because of Tsukigimori and because of the big names attached, like Ren and Momose.
Kyoko most definitely had a great deal to do with making those things become even more popular - especially Dark Moon, but she’s also very good at not obviously standing out.
This is the first time she’s in something that starts with such a small audience, which means it has so much room to grow.
The fact that the ratings are so low make it clear that Marumi on her own isn’t enough to attract a lot of attention, so as the ratings go up (and I have no doubt they will, after the way Kyoko reassures Chiori), I think it’ll be very clearly because of Kyoko - and a lot more people will start taking notice of her.